Graphic [Legacy] Fakémon Feedback

[Aki]

Welcome to Fakémon Feedback!

The concept of this thread is simple: post any kind of fakemon or original pokemon design that you're working on. This can mean spritework, hand drawn sketches, or just written ideas. Things like custom mega evolutions or regional variations fit in here too.

Please keep the following in mind while using this thread:

• If you notice something that has been posted but hasn't received any feedback, please consider providing the poster with some form of feedback before you move onto later posts.
• Put some thought and effort into your feedback. While not all short feedback is bad, generally you want to make sure you're offering something worthwhile to the person requesting feedback.
• Try not to focus too much on style choices, unless the poster mentions they're trying to imitate a particular one. It's pretty rude to only comment on how someone's work "would look nicer" if it were done differently (typically a more modern style, like saying gen 4 over gen 3 would look better).
• Be respectful and civil. This thread isn't an excuse to be rude to another person or to tell them their artwork is bad, be helpful instead.

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[Mashirosakura]

I mean, whatever feedback you can give me is appreciated. Also I kind of need a name for this guy.

 

[Nic]

I mean, whatever feedback you can give me is appreciated. Also I kind of need a name for this guy.

I really like its design! it strays away from what a pokemon usually looks like, and i think thats cool. Maybe a play on terror, like... Tearroar... idk, nice concept though!

 

[TechSkylander1518]

There's so many cool design elements-an unusual mouth, a tail with its own head, the wing-like bits on the head-that are all wrapped up in a sweet red/black body, I think it's going to be quite popular!

It's a bit tricky to come up with names just based on the visuals-behavior and typing might tie into a name, too-but a couple names that you could consider-

• Crimsin (play of crimson and sin-it looks like a Dark-type)
• Redruff (play of redrum, murder spelled backwards, and ruff because it looks like a canine)
• (was expecting to have more but I'm drawing a blank ATM, wanted to do something with palindromes or referencing its slit)

Not sure if these names are good for a whole species-I almost feel like I'm nicknaming one I caught myself, if that makes sense-but I hope the spitballing helps!

 

[Fontbane]

I still think Chompex is a good name for it- chomp+apex. I really like the feel you gave it with the vertical teeth. Gives it a great uncanny valley feel to make it more menacing.

 

[Mashirosakura]

I mean we kind of decided on the name Mantaphlex over on the discord, though. Thanks for all the suggestions regardless!

 

[TechSkylander1518]

Heck, I need to check into the discord more often! Manthaplex is an awesome name! (It even feels like it fits the Pokemon-it feels intricate, if that makes sense? Like the multiple syllables kinda give the feeling of there being a lot to notice in the Pokemon. I don't know very much about linguistics, but I really like the feel of it!)

 

[TheLightSword]

a cub-lion fire fakemon was made

now that i'm looking at it,the evo will be electric fire
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i tryed to add black lines for the cloud but it just made it look weird...idk​

 

[Hematite]

Goodness, I saw this and could have sworn I responded to it, but apparently not! XP Sorry to have left you with no reply for so long!

I really like those two, especially the unevolved/cub one!!

The only issue is that the evolution sticks out to me as looking a lot like Luxray; I would work on making the mane a little more distinct (particularly the way it connects to the snout, which is quite similar to Luxray's), but that's more minor and I think the main issue is the tail - you'd probably be able to get away with a similar tail on something else, but since it's also an Electric-type lion, it jumps out more immediately and I feel it needs more pulling it away from Luxray, since the only major things are the colors and the flame. That aside, it looks really nice!!

 

[TheLightSword]

thanks for le feedback!
ye it does look like luxray, thats actually the main piont for this, we wanted this to be like a rival to it in the wilderness, so we had to make it a bit similliar(allot similliar), so yeeeh :3

 

[Hematite]

Oh, that's fair, then! It's sort of like Throh and Sawk - they're a duo of Pokémon that look rather similar and live in the same locations as one another, but are meant as parallels rather than relatives. So if they're meant to be paralleled anyway, the visual similarity makes a lot more sense!

 

[Taq]

thanks for le feedback!
ye it does look like luxray, thats actually the main piont for this, we wanted this to be like a rival to it in the wilderness, so we had to make it a bit similliar(allot similliar), so yeeeh :3

I wanted to say it reminds me of pyrolynx from PEG a bit. But other then that (and the luxray issues), it's fine.

 

[Hematite]

Oh, speaking of reminding one of Fakemon from another fangame, I have a pretty minor question to add!

There's a Fakemon line in my game that's based on a Glaucus atlanticus; unfortunately, it was designed long before artcanary or I had heard of or played Uranium, and not only does Uranium have a Glaucus atlanticus, Glavinug, but I used it on my team and it quickly ascended to the status of "my favorite Fakemon in all of Uranium (and possibly any fangame ever)." I was worried ours was too similar to Glavinug as a result - I wouldn't want anyone mistaking it for having been ripped off from Uranium, especially when the line from Uranium was already my favorite, so I've messed around with it since and was wondering if it now seems distinct enough!

Both Canary and I have been involved with this design, so of course I can't post it without giving due credit to them as well! (The art of it I'm posting is mine, though, just because it's the most recent iteration.) But yeah, is this Fakemon, Razure, visually distinct enough from Glavinug to work, or is there anything else I should do to make it more unique (short of making it not a Glaucus anymore, that is)?

For comparison, the original art of Glavinug is here, and Glavinug's in-game sprite from Uranium (it wasn't originally made for Uranium, only adopted with permission, so it's a bit different from the original art) can be seen here.

(It's worth noting that as far as functionality like game data/stats/moves/types, they have a lot less in common, so I'm only worried about their appearances.)

Edit: rewrote the post.

Edit 2 about half an hour later: added like two sentences to make it make more sense after being rewritten. XP

 

[TechSkylander1518]

I think it looks pretty distinct! With just the body, Glavinug is more sharp at its edges where Razure seems more wispy, and Glavinug is accented by light blue where Razure has its glowing green. Not only are they set apart in this way, but they also have their specific reasons to be set apart in that way-Glavinug is designed to look like an Ice type, while Razure (I'm guessing) is designed more with bio-luminescence in mind. Just in that overview, the differences already start to stand out, and you can look at the details to see where those differences lead, like the orbs on Razure's head and body or the wisps trailing behind it. I think people that played Uranium might recognize the similarities between the two, but in a "oh, neat, they based a Pokemon off that animal, too" kinda way. I can't guarantee that you won't get annoying comments about it-I've seen Fakemon with similar origins before get falsely accused (Frague in Spectrum, the Kittorch line in Ethereal Gates, and I swear some Pokemon in Sage that I can't remember), but for people that actually try to understand a design, I think you've both done great!

 

[Taq]

Oh, speaking of reminding one of Fakemon from another fangame, I have a pretty minor question to add!

There's a Fakemon line in my game that's based on a Glaucus atlanticus; unfortunately, it was designed long before artcanary or I had heard of or played Uranium, and not only does Uranium have a Glaucus atlanticus, Glavinug, but I used it on my team and it quickly ascended to the status of "my favorite Fakemon in all of Uranium (and possibly any fangame ever)." I was worried ours was too similar to Glavinug as a result - I wouldn't want anyone mistaking it for having been ripped off from Uranium, especially when the line from Uranium was already my favorite, so I've messed around with it since and was wondering if it now seems distinct enough!

Both Canary and I have been involved with this design, so of course I can't post it without giving due credit to them as well! (The art of it I'm posting is mine, though, just because it's the most recent iteration.) But yeah, is this Fakemon, Razure, visually distinct enough from Glavinug to work, or is there anything else I should do to make it more unique (short of making it not a Glaucus anymore, that is)?

For comparison, the original art of Glavinug is here, and Glavinug's in-game sprite from Uranium (it wasn't originally made for Uranium, only adopted with permission, so it's a bit different from the original art) can be seen here.

(It's worth noting that as far as functionality like game data/stats/moves/types, they have a lot less in common, so I'm only worried about their appearances.)

Edit: rewrote the post.

Edit 2 about half an hour later: added like two sentences to make it make more sense after being rewritten. XP

I think it's good, it looks bioluminescent to me.
I have that feeling sometimes with my designs where it looks familiar (I can't design my third Legendary because of it). But the thing is that it's only the same animal, not same pokémon. Anyway I think only it's face reminds me of Glavinug compared to everything else. Maybe modify it to be different then it'll be perfect!

 

[TheLightSword]

A bunsh of regional forms were made

any feedback?​

 

[Hematite]

Oh, wow, those all look really cool!!! A lot of the official ones have only one major change and then focus mostly on texture changes (like markings, colors, et cetera rather than physical alterations), and all of these did that perfectly!!

Some of my more specific thoughts:

> The Bonsly's face, although very cute, doesn't look much like a Bonsly - Sudowoodo looks fine, but maybe you should consider making it a little more compact like "Sinnohan" Bonsly's face? They look a little more like two different Pokémon than any of the others you have, so I thought I'd point that out!

> On both Hoothoot and Noctowl, I might make the bowtie bigger and remove the middle segment so it's a simpler, more natural shape; I think it stands out a little too much as more like an accessory than a natural part of the Pokémon, especially since it's sprited the same between the two of them. I would maybe suggest going for something like Rowlet's bow tie where it clearly resembles something else as well (Rowlet's looks like it's made of leaves) so it doesn't feel so much like an accessory? Perhaps feathers could work!

> I love the Hippopotas and Hippowdon! I think they're perfect as they are!!

> For the Arbok, the fiery marks don't look quite so much like a face as the patterns there usually do - I see them as a mouth and eyes, but I think this is one instance where you could afford to be more blatant/specifically shaped rather than trying to make it seem more natural! It's pretty much fine now anyway, though, haha.

> Aaand the opposite for Teddiursa and Ursaring, eheheh - these two probably should be made to look more like markings than wrappings. I would look at something like Tyrogue or Medicham, which has something similar but looks like a part of the Pokémon - even if they stick out a little or fan off of it at the ends, you should at least tighten them and avoid making them quite so loose, because it looks a little more like they're dressed up than like those are parts of their bodies. That said, though, that Ursaring looks REALLY COOL!!! I would totally love to use it!!

> Your Gastly line looks awesome and I don't think I have anything to say about it!!

All around, those are really awesome!! : D

 

[BluePlays]

This is a fire type camel/hippo line that I created. You can encounter them in a secret chamber in one of my caves in Pokemon Unknown.
Would love some feedback on them, Thanks in advance.

 

[TechSkylander1518]

They look really neat! I really like the combination of camel, hippo, and volcano, it's such a fun idea!

I think the evolved form could stand to look a bit more distinct from the prevo, though. While I can definitely see all the details that set it apart, the first glance makes it a little hard to see, because it initially just looks like a taller version. I think this could be done without changing too much of the design-just something little like making the evolved form's face a bit wider or changing the pose could help make it feel more like a new Pokemon, and bring out the changes a little more.

 

[Involuntary Twitch]

Oh, speaking of reminding one of Fakemon from another fangame, I have a pretty minor question to add!

There's a Fakemon line in my game that's based on a Glaucus atlanticus; unfortunately, it was designed long before artcanary or I had heard of or played Uranium, and not only does Uranium have a Glaucus atlanticus, Glavinug, but I used it on my team and it quickly ascended to the status of "my favorite Fakemon in all of Uranium (and possibly any fangame ever)." I was worried ours was too similar to Glavinug as a result - I wouldn't want anyone mistaking it for having been ripped off from Uranium, especially when the line from Uranium was already my favorite, so I've messed around with it since and was wondering if it now seems distinct enough!

Both Canary and I have been involved with this design, so of course I can't post it without giving due credit to them as well! (The art of it I'm posting is mine, though, just because it's the most recent iteration.) But yeah, is this Fakemon, Razure, visually distinct enough from Glavinug to work, or is there anything else I should do to make it more unique (short of making it not a Glaucus anymore, that is)?

For comparison, the original art of Glavinug is here, and Glavinug's in-game sprite from Uranium (it wasn't originally made for Uranium, only adopted with permission, so it's a bit different from the original art) can be seen here.

(It's worth noting that as far as functionality like game data/stats/moves/types, they have a lot less in common, so I'm only worried about their appearances.)

Edit: rewrote the post.

Edit 2 about half an hour later: added like two sentences to make it make more sense after being rewritten. XP

You're totally in the clear. There are plenty of fakemon based on Glaucus Atlanticus, and not just in Uranium. (There's one in Pokemon Sage, too.) It's a pretty cool-looking animal, and your design is unique and cool looking enough to stand apart. In general, it's not so bad if you create a fakemon and then find out someone else had a similar idea. So long as you're not basing your design *directly* on another design by someone else, you aren't ripping off anyone -- except for nature itself, I guess.

(For the record, Glavinug isn't even my design -- it's by Pequedark-Velvet.)

 

[TheLightSword]

another variant!